Showing Vs Telling

I know examples help. The examples below contain the SAME story, but the first version primarily “tells” whereas the second version primarily “shows” (you can click to enlarge/see them if you like).

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Just like always, you’ll notice that “showing” involves

  • direct dialogue (and/or thoughts) — like “Rachel, I’m going to go over and sit with the popular girls today.”
  • sensory details — like “curls poking out everywhere”
  • direct action — like “I nodded.”
  • free indirect style (where the narrator speaks with the “voice” of the point of view character)– like “sitting there in her hopelessly dorky outfit”
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